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Last year, I semi-cheated by putting up 250 words from a completed work because I hadn't gotten to any swoon-worthy parts in my WIP. This year, I'm delighted to share a selection from my actual work in progress!
She stands with her face turned up to the sky,
smiling in wonder as she's dusted with snow. “This is amazing.”
Her hair is the color of maple leaves in fall and sugared with fat,
white flakes. There is snow on her
hat, her coat, her green mittens, her eyelashes. She blinks, and one fluffy flake dances away. Her smile falters when she finally
looks at me. “I guess this isn't
that exciting for you.”
“No, it's--
You're...” The words are caught in my throat. I want to tell her she looks beautiful, sparkling with snow
and pink-cheeked. I want to say
she's the loveliest thing I've ever seen.
That she's like everything good about Christmas and none of the
stress. That she makes me feel
like I might burst with bliss. “You're
beautiful.”
“So are you.” She smiles.
We kiss and warmth rushes through me like a
freight train. I wrap my arms
around her, loving the way she leans into me so far I know I'm the only thing
keeping her from falling. Wind
blows snow around my bare head, but I'm on fire from within so I don't feel
cold anymore. Her minty taste is
cooler than ever in the crisp chill of the night.
This.
This is the reason we get up in the morning and do the things that we
do. Because every day there's a
chance someone will want to kiss you in the snow and make the world
amazing. Make your body work
overtime, remembering how to fill the tiniest capiliaries with hot blood, and
stirring the remote corners of your brain with electricity. There's the chance you might remember
why you want to stay alive for as long as possible. Because every day, you might get a kiss from a beautiful
girl who glows in moonlight and covers your ears with her mittened hands to
keep them warm when neither of you want to stop kissing in a empty parking lot
that looks as magical as a snow globe under the right conditions. These conditions. This girl. This snow.
These kisses.
14 comments:
Beautiful. I love it. And that picture-swoon! Your descriptions are awesome. I especially love. "Her hair is the color of maple leaves in fall and sugared with fat, white flakes"
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You know I love this scene! LOL. I think this is absolutely one of my favorite kissing scenes. :)
Ooh! I love this, Liz. Very beautiful! :)
Love the voice, imagery and tease! Can't wait to read more.
I agree with all the above. Your imagery is amazing.
This was so beautiful! Loved the atmosphere, and the writing :)
This is brimming with sensory detail and lyricism. Well done!!!
Oh wow - I love this. Love hearing it from the guys POV. Beautiful writing and romantic piece. Great job!
This is absolutely adorable! So many details! Love that it's from the boy's POV, and I love the last few sentences. Fantastic, Liz!
Aww! My fave line: "Her hair is the color of maple leaves in fall and sugared with fat, white flakes."
Beautiful! I can see the snowflakes :D and the last lines are swoon-worthy on their own (writing swoon-worthy :D)
Your imagery is beautiful!
Thanks everyone for visiting my stop on the blogfest. I tried to comment earlier with thanks, but apparently blogger ate it. Stupid, hungry blogger.
- Liz
Oh wow, what a lovely scene. You're amazing. Thanks for sharing this with us.
~B.
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